You have decided to enter a short story competition. The competition rules say that the story must end with the following words: I will never forget that meal as long as I live. Write your story for the competition (around 200 words).

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I was visiting my friend Susie in Italy, where she had moved with her family sinceThis text is not necessary two years agoWrong word/s. That night I´ve plannedVTense to surprise the whole family with an Argentine typical foodWrong word/s that, as everybody knowGrammar mistake, must consist basically of meat.{***}Good content! {1}

Taking advantage of a day that they were not at home{***}Punctuation or capitalization I prepared an enormous pie of meatWord order as {***}Missing word or words main course and for dessert I thought that it would be the appropriate moment to bringWrong word/s them a big box of traditional sweets from Argentina I had brought to them as {***}Missing word or words gift.{***}Well constructed sentence/s! {2}

{***}Paragraphing problem {3}I was very proud of myself because I had been able to managedGrammar mistake everything alone and I was sure it would be a great surprise for them. And it was, but not in the way I had thought.{***}Well constructed sentence/s! {4}

As soon as they arrived home{***}Punctuation or capitalization I realized that something went badWrong word/s {5}. They seemed to be smelling something they didn't like. I got nervous, but I went on with {***}Missing word or words dinner. When everybody wereGrammar mistake seated, I put the pie on the table, I cut it and tried to serve a slice to Susie's father. And then it happened. Visibly bothered he said to me: "Don,tPunctuation or capitalization you know? We areVTense all vegetarian since everWrong word/s". {***}Punctuation or capitalization {6} {***}Well constructed sentence/s! {***}Good choice of vocabulary! {7}

{***}Paragraphing problem {8}Quickly I tried to remember any time I had eaten meat with Susie, but I couldn't. Evidently we had never talkVTense about it although we had been friends since childhood. What a disaster!.Punctuation or capitalization {9} {***}Well constructed sentence/s! {***}Good choice of vocabulary!

But these wasGrammar mistake not all. I saved the situation preparing some salads and vegetarian sandwiches for them and everything seemed to improve. But then I served the dessert. Alice, Susie's sister, took one of the little sweets, bit it and shouted:{10} "It has a worm!".Punctuation or capitalization No words. You can be sure I will never forget that meal as long as I live.{11}

 

Statistics

InstancesDescription
3Verb tense
6Punctuation or capitalization error
1This text is not necessary
3Missing word or words
2Paragraphing problem (e.g. no clear topic sentence)
5Wrong word/s
1Word order
4Grammar mistake
1Good content!
4Well constructed sentence/s!
2Good choice of vocabulary!
Negative total: 25
Positive total: 7

 

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